Blog Assignment 1.5
The language and words used are very detailed and advanced. It easily provides an image in the reader’s mind. The way the setting is described to the shepherd boys. All this detail was based around what the author saw. He shared the beauty of the outside world and how nice it is. However the scene changes to the bazaar. The author switched to smell. Sadly, putrid smells can ruin the beauty of anything if there is any beauty to be spotted. And what’s really happening in the Bazaar is all chaos and anything but beauty and grace. The smells and the signs of how unkempt the Bazaar was. An example was the fact there was grass growing out of the roofs of houses. Going back to the smells, the smells the author mentioned, charcoal, tobacco, cooking oil, months-old dirt, and human excrement, are all smells that either harm the lungs of anyone who breathes it in or the kind to make someone gag.
As for the structure of it, it shows that even though things are nice on the outside, it doesn’t mean it will be on the inside. Even the people in the Bazaar are leaving. As for me, the reader, it gives a different feeling when it goes from beauty to chaos and chaos to beauty. Since this is a situation of beauty to chaos, it’s more likely to leave a negative feeling after reading since the ending situation is more likely to affect the reader than the beginning. If it were to start with the chaos then to the beauty, it gives a sense of escapement and freedom. Being trapped in the dirty Bazaar to the open area of the world. However the outside world to the Bazaar gives a sense of things that aren't as nice as they seem. It’s given the impression that if this world outside of the city is nice then the city has to be on the nicer side as well. But in the author’s writing it is seen that it’s wrong. With this change of writing and setting, comes the setting of mood. As I shared before, the mood of the outside world is freedom and tranquility. However the sudden change to the Bazaar gives the mood of repulsiveness. The mood change can have a different effect on the reader depending on how it’s written. In this case it’s a sudden change after the beautiful characteristics of the outside world. This can come off as a shock or a ‘woah’ moment. What I mean is like a room full of light suddenly goes dark. That’s the same effect this change has on the reader.
Looking back and re-reading the work, the writing itself is very confusing and hard to follow. Also, it sounds like it repeats a little bit. Because of this obstacle, it’s hard to understand what is being said or what is trying to be conveyed. The author poorly showed that they knew the deeper meaning of the writing. They only focused on the context of the writing rather than the purpose and really anything else that should have been evaluated. So for the first score, the score that I would give would be a 2. 2 Marks for comprehension.
ReplyDeleteAs for the second part, due to the vagueness of the writer, it’s difficult to give a full analysis. The paragraphs shows that the author should have looking a little more to get a full undrerstanding on the original author’s writing and style. If they would have done this, their analysis would be lengther, more detailed, and would have provided more content for a stronger structure. So overall this would receive 8 marks. 10 marks for the writing as a whole.